Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of academic credits are more important than the other credits in terms of measuring achievement. It seems to me that informal accomplishment is the best method and I will explain why in
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informal performance. The
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factor we need to take into consideration is that
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way of thinking is too narrow to be accepted. In today's technology-focused, a plenty number of youngster have fruitful histories in their free time activities, but they have
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difficulties in their
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a successful person nowadays since they gain a lot of achievements while their
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that extracurricular activities consist
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proper time to refresh people's mind.
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number of assignments, tasks, and deadlines is undoubtedly full of pressure.
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their performance, and
education
routine is absolutely not the answer. The
last
reason for
this
view is that soft skill is very important, especially for
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available in every person is various and hard to be measured only with academic achievement.
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athlete would not be suitable
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other sports or academic competitions. Looking from another perspective, it might be said that science or social insight is crucial as well, particularly for researcher or lecturer.
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, I believe that every knowledge is unique, both academic or non-academic.
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leads to the opinion said every person can choose their own way to become
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. In conclusion,
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good merit, I firmly believe that the other outside activities have more significant benefits for every citizen.
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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