Many people believe that formal “pen and paper” examinations are not the best method of assessing educational achievement. Discuss this view and give your own opinion.

There has been much discussion revolving around the issue of academic credits are more important than the other credits in terms of measuring achievement. It seems to me that informal accomplishment is the best method and I will explain why in
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informal performance. The
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factor we need to take into consideration is that
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way of thinking is too narrow to be accepted. In today's technology-focused, a plenty number of youngster have fruitful histories in their free time activities, but they have
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difficulties in their
education
life.
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a successful person nowadays since they gain a lot of achievements while their
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that extracurricular activities consist
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proper time to refresh people's mind.
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number of assignments, tasks, and deadlines is undoubtedly full of pressure.
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means that to release their stress, they need an exact event to
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rebuild
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their performance, and
education
routine is absolutely not the answer. The
last
reason for
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view is that soft skill is very important, especially for
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. Abilities
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available in every person is various and hard to be measured only with academic achievement.
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athlete would not be suitable
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other sports or academic competitions. Looking from another perspective, it might be said that science or social insight is crucial as well, particularly for researcher or lecturer.
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, I believe that every knowledge is unique, both academic or non-academic.
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. In conclusion,
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good merit, I firmly believe that the other outside activities have more significant benefits for every citizen.
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