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Since time immemorial, in certain drier parts of the world, fresh water has always been a scarce natural resource. However, in the present time, due to various reasons, scarcity of fresh water has become a global issue.

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In order to serve a greedy man's needs and
owe
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 to
the
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technological
advancement
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 we have lost almost all natural resources.
Fresh
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Freshwater
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water
 tops the list as it is naturally not available in most parts of the world. There are numerous reasons resulting
to
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 the lack
fresh
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water
. The below paragraphs will list down the causes and some practical ways to overcome
it
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them
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.
Firstly
, it is alarming to imagine our future with no fresh
water
 to drink. Lakes, waterfalls,rivers and are some of the natural sources of
fresh
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freshwater
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water
. They flourish when it rains heavily. It naturally rains for 3 months in a year, but due to the pollution in air and
water
, the
weather
 cycle has changed.
Irresponsibile
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Irresponsible
Responsible
 citizens throw garbages into rivers and lakes,
contaminate
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 the
water
 and
there by
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make
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 it not available to others.
This
 has now become a serious threat and
as a
result
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 government puts up ' Do not throw garbages', ' Keep
you
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 city clean'
sign boards
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signboards
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 in all picnic spots.
Secondly
, due to the drastic changes in the
climate
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 we tend to have longer summers and shorter winter seasons. Though we save
water
 in dams and wells to avoid
water
 scarcity in sunny
weather
, due to the extreme
weather
 conditions they all get dried up. The aforementioned causes leading us to be devoid of
water
 can be dwindled by maintaining a healthy environment. Planting trees in abundance decreases air pollution, increases rainfall and regulates the
weather
 cycle. Utilizing a garbage unit system will help in
disposing
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 the waste
approriately
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appropriately
 and
also
 separate the
bio-degradable
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biodegradable
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 from the non-biodegradable wastes. Everyone should
enroll
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into
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on
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 organisations like 'Save the earth',' Go green', which helps and educates the public to take measures to protect
the
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apply
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natural resources. To conclude, I believe citizens becoming more responsible and thoughtful of their future with
create
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 a bigger impact in saving the
water
 bodies and protect the earth.
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