The best way to help underachieving pupils is to have compulsory after school activities which they must attend. This way they will become more involved in school and their grades will improve. To what extent do you agree?

Extracurricular exercises are the best way to help lagging
students
and improve their grades. They must attend it because they will become more involved in education and their grades will improve.
First
of all, I believe that underachieving
students
must attend compulsory after
school
tasks which are essential for them. Nowadays the amount of underachieving
students
is increasing steadily and gradually. It depends on not only
students
but
also
educational issues. Excess of pupils and lack of educational personnel have a negative effect because teachers can not pay attention to each student.
School
authorities know about
this
problem and tried to help them by creating out-of-
school
lessons
and activities
such
as homework review,
also
pupils must attend those vital
lessons
, because if they don’t visit, in a negative case they will be deducted.
Secondly
, as practice shows, additional
lessons
after
school
have a positive influence on undergraduates.
This
allows them to be involved in the education environment properly.
School
surveys show that lagging
students
who spend their free time on extra
lessons
or other educational activities out of the
school
reach success in a short time.
For example
, I and my several classmates had to attend those
lessons
and we had been visiting additional
lessons
for 3 months,
furthermore
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it allowed us to correct grades in a particular subject and pass the final exam. In a nutshell, I agree that compulsory after
school
activities are significant for some pupils and they must visit them.
Therefore
if a student realizes that fact he should find out some way that helps him or her.
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