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some people believe that the best way to deal with heavy traffic in city centres is for privately owned vehicles to be banned, others however think this is not a realistic solution

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some experts agree that the right option in controlling
traffic
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 congestion in major cities is to disallow private cars while others assumed
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 opinion is unachievable. I disagree that private owned vehicle should be banned from
city
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the city
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 centre's
hence
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traffic
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light
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 should be set up in busy areas and
road
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 network mainly for private vehicle needs to be constructed. on the one hand,
traffic
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 lights should be placed in strategic places on major roads in order to regulate the influx of both private and public cars.
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,drivers and commuters
needs
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 to educated on the colours of each
traffic
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light
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.They should be aware that different colours symbolize different meanings like red colour is for
stop
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a stop
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 while yellow means ready.
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,
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Osun
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osun
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the osun
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 state government averted
traffic
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 in a popular location in Oshogbo which is the capital of the state by putting
traffic
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light
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 in strategic places.
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,
construction
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the construction
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 of roads
which
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that
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 allows free movement of vehicles is one of the roles of government.
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, each
road
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 assigned for different motorist's and whoever violates the order should pay
fine
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a fine
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.
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, a particular lane is allocated for
government owned
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government-owned
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 buses(BRT) in Lagos state and no private car owner dares to navigate on
this
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road
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. In conclusion,
private owned
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private-owned
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 vehicles shouldn't be prohibited
on
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in
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 city
centre's
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centres
centre
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. Meanwhile,
traffic
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light
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 can be placed to control
traffic
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 and each
road
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 should be labelled.
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  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – Problems
  • Body paragraph 2 – Solutions
  • Conclusion

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  • One of the first problems of the...
  • Another problem that needs to be considered...
  • A possible solution to this problem would be...
  • One immediate practical solution is to...

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