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Some information in films, books and on the Internet has a negative influence on young people. Some people think that such information should be controlled. Give your opinion on both sides of view use your own experience and example.

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Nowadays, as
information
 technology develops, the access to a wide variety of
information
 has been becoming more and more multiple and convenient, which not only contains something useful but
also
 the
information
 that has a bad impact on the young generation. Some
people
 insist that the latter kind of
information
 should be limited by relevant authorities seriously. I think that overall, I agree with that. Undoubtedly, many
people
 should not expect that the
information
 with a negative influence on young
people
 can be completely removed by excessive media
censorship
 and check of contents for literary works and artworks. After all, many printed works and music
works
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 aimed at satirizing reality would be difficult to avoid some violent and sexual images, but most of them can be seen as valuable masterpieces in human history,
such
 as some French operas and paintings in the 19th century. If
censorship
 offices endlessly tighten
its
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 review procedures,
this
 can restrict the creativity of artists and writers and infringe on individuals’ right to free expression.
Nevertheless
, the governments cannot neglect the importance of checking the
information
 that
people
 can acquire from the Internet and some cultural products mainly because some sexually explicit or violent images in some films or videos might motivate young
people
 to develop passive values. More precisely, after watching the kind of videos or films, they are likely to imitate the violent acts, offensive language and sexual behaviour that they are exposed to in the media and
therefore
 commit a crime in the future.
Therefore
, some measures that exist in many countries, like the movie rating system, seem to be quite necessary. In conclusion, I think that the government should keep using
censorship
 to control violence, offensive language and sexual images in the media as long as their
censorship
 decisions are well informed and thoroughly considered.
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