Some children receive almost no encouragement from their parents regarding their performance at school, while others received too much pressure from there over enthusiastic parents which can have a negative impact on the child. Why do you think parents put too much pressure on the children to perform well at school? What do you think the role of a parent should be in their child’s education?

While there are some
parents
do
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who do
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not show any interest in their
kids
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educational progress at
school
, there are others who are over caring
to
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the extinct that could reflect badly on their
children
.
This
type of
parents
puts high stress on their youngsters because probably they have had
bad
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experience back when they were students.
Parents
role
in the education of their
children
must be a supervisory and supportive
role
that completes the
role
of the
school
which is to teach and educate. As it is known, fathers and mothers always want the best for their
children
, and they do their best to fulfil their needs, especially for the things that they could not get or fulfil when they were younger.
Therefore
, they will push hard on their kids to drive them to do their best, especially in their studies, so that they can guarantee a good higher education and
therefore
a good career that pays well and satisfies their needs.
For example
, one of my classmates who was lazy at
school
and did not make it to the university,
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struggled to find a job that pays his rent and family expenses, so he pushes his
children
to focus and do their best at class so that they do not face the problems he is facing now. To be honest, I think the
role
of
parents
in pupil’s education is vital and it is to complete the
role
of teachers. Teachers
educate
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in class and
parents
follow up at home.
Parents
must be monitoring their
children
behaviour inside and outside
school
. Not only that, but they must make sure that they are doing their homework on time and help them finishing them if needed. To conclude, there are
parents
who stress their kids to highly perform in their studies to have
better
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future, while there are others who are careless.
Nevertheless
,
parents
role
in the educational progress of the students is vital and completes the
role
of the teachers.
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