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bar chart depicts information about the rate of British inhabitants who are between the 18 and 65+ and are providing wealth to donations between the
year
1990 and 2010. Overall, as is shown by the graph, the younger generation was giving more money to charity in the
first
year
, while the elderly were transferring less.
However
, there was an upward trend in the
middle aged
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group and seniors in the
second
year
. In 1990, the numbers of charity in 18-25 started with approximately 17%.
Then
, it gradually increased to just over 30% in 26-35. After that, it jumped to a peak of about 42% in 36-50, which became the highest number in the period.
Moreover
,
this
dropped steadily with 7%, to a percentage of 35% in 51-65.
Finally
, it
plummet
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with
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2,5% in 65 plussers. In 2010, the younger aged group began with almost half of the number as in the
first
year
.
However
,
this
increased significantly to just under 25%. From here, there was a gradual rise to 35% in 36-50.
Then
, it
grow
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4% in 51-65, which became the biggest number in 2010.
This
dropped moderately to 35% in the
last
group.
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