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People born today can expect to live longer than people in previous generations. What are some of the positive and negative implications of this phenomenon?Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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The
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 of a student is often correlated to his
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 as an adult. Being a student,
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 must have
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 like
dedication
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 and memorization that helps them excel in their academics.
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, I believe these are the same
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 that help them achieve greater things in their professional career because the time when they adopt these
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 play a major role.
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 have a limited scope of expanding ideas out of the syllabus or textbooks and children are forced to memorize the content they are taught.
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 many
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 are not willing to adapt to
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 technique and end up performing badly.
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, definitions and theories do not allow
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 to deviate from the concept forcing them to stick to mugging up. On the flip side, when you grow up
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 quality of remembering the same thing helps you in a lot of professions and becomes the leading reason for enormous
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. In professions like acting and stand-up comedy,
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 must memorize the script to be able to achieve
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.
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, there is another trait that helps pupils stick to higher performances in school.
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 attribute is
dedication
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 which helps
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 to be focused on their goals and not give up even when there is a failure, while as
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 they may not understand the value of hard work and
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 due to lack of purpose.
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, Steve Jobs was a college dropout, but his quality of perseverance helped him to build a tech giant named 'Apple'. The inheritance of
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 trait not only helps
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 as a student but
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 supports their long-term professional careers. As we all know,
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 is no accident. It takes hard work,
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, and passion for the job that we do. To sum it up, even though many
students
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 fail to inherit the
qualities
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 like memorization and
dedication
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 in their childhood resulting in poor academic performance. Adaption of these same
qualities
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 as adults help them achieve successful careers as adults
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • life expectancy
  • seasoned workforce
  • health advancements
  • chronic conditions
  • social welfare systems
  • pension plans
  • policy adjustments
  • aging population
  • cultural experiences
  • loneliness
  • mental health
  • geriatric care
  • consumption of resources
  • environmental stresses
  • climate change
  • resource depletion
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