You would like to join the local orchestra Write a letter of application to the orchestra. In the letter: • Introduce yourself and your instrument of choice • Explain how your credentials make you a good candidate • Express your enthusiasm for music

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Dear Mr. Green, I am writing

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letter to express my interest in joining your orchestra. My name is John and I am 26 years old. I have a keen interest in playing

Guitar

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. I have been playing

Guitar

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since my childhood and I learn playing

guitar

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from my father. My father is a music teacher at Loyal University in London. I had a music degree from the best university in Chandigarh and I

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performed in many music concerts in the university competitions and in the Restaurants.

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, I was rewarded as a best Guitarist at the state level in the Youth Festival. I am

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working part-time in the " BLUEMOON" restaurant. Playing

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has been my passion since Childhood, and I want to pursue

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hobby at a professional level.

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, I think that your orchestra will be a good platform for me. Looking forward to a prompt response from you! Yours faithfully, John.

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Consider adding more details about your performances to enhance your qualifications.

coherence and cohesion

Try to vary your sentence structures to improve the flow of your ideas.

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Ensure the introduction clearly outlines the purpose of your letter more explicitly.

coherence and cohesion

Your enthusiasm for music clearly comes through in your writing.

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You provided relevant background information about your musical experience.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

firstly
secondly
thirdly
in additional
moreover
also
for example
for instance
therefore
however
although
even though
despite

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Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Single idea per paragraph

Greeting and closing

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 9.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 9.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

Suitable writing tone

Appropriate word count

8 paragraphs

156 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

application
instrument
credentials
candidate
enthusiasm
music degrees
formal training
performances
collaborate
positive contribution
passion
orchestra
ensemble
genres
styles
experience
notable achievements
teamwork

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