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motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. what are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

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Roadways are helping humankind to travel very fast and
also
 to cover long distances.
However
,
in contrast
 to ,uses there are
also
 problems like
accidents
 which will result in loss of life and sometimes loss of some body parts. The most viable solution for
this
 problem is implementing strict laws which will help to decrease the rate of
accidents
. At
first
, let's discuss why motorways become more dangerous for journeys. Practically there have not enough road signs with a speed limit. We used to see so many road signs in all corners of the city but, on the
,
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highways there are very few and so many motorists without any prior signal they will try to overtake the vehicle which will result in
accidents
. A recent study, made by Stanford University on the
accidents
 occurring on the highways due to lack of signage's shows shocking results, the rate has been increased from 5% in 2015 to 20% in 2020 which is so huge. To tackle
this
 problem the government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and
also
 in schools to educate
people
 about the dangers of not having signage's or going with high speed rather than what is to be maintained and
also
 on the drunk drivers, etc.
In addition
, the government has to bring laws
which
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 are too strict. The above-mentioned points are feasible solutions to make motorways help mankind. In India,
for example
, the government has introduced a law that no vehicle should cross a speed limit of 100 km/hr on ring roads,
this
 resulted in a huge decline in the rate of
accidents
 that occur on ring roads. In conclusion, motorways help
people
 to move fast but, sometimes results in
accidents
 which is a major issue that can result in
loss
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 of
people
 lives.
However
, can be addressed through educating the
people
 about the dangers and
also
 by bringing strict road laws.
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