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motorways help people travel quickly and cover long distances but they also cause problems. what are the problems of motorways and what solutions are there?

Roadways are helping humankind to travel very fast and
also
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 to cover long distances.
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,
in contrast
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,
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uses
there
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, there
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 are
also
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 problems like
accidents
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 which will result in loss of life and sometimes loss of some body parts. The most viable solution for
this
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 problem is implementing strict laws
which
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, which
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 will help to decrease the rate of
accidents
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. At
first,
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let's discuss why motorways become more dangerous for journeys.
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 there
have
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are
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 not enough road signs with a speed limit. We used to see so many road signs in all corners of the city
but
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,
on
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but on
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 the
,
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highways
there
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, there
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 are very few
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, and
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 so many motorists without any prior
signal
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signal,
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 they will try to overtake the vehicle
which
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, which
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 will result in
accidents
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. A recent study, made by Stanford University on the
accidents
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 occurring on the highways
due to
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lack
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a lack
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 of signage's shows shocking results, the rate has
been
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increased from 5% in 2015 to 20% in 2020
which
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, which
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 is
so
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huge. To tackle
this
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problem
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problem,
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 the government should launch a publicity campaign in the media and
also
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 in schools to educate
people
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 about the dangers of not having
signage's
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signage
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 or going
with
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at
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 high
speed
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speeds
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 rather than what is to be maintained
and
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, and
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also
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 on
the
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drunk drivers, etc.
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, the government has to bring
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in
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laws which are too strict. The above-mentioned points are feasible solutions to make motorways help mankind. In India,
for example
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, the government has introduced a law that no vehicle should cross a speed limit of 100 km/hr on ring roads,
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this
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which
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 resulted in a huge decline in the rate of
accidents
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 that occur on ring roads. In conclusion, motorways help
people
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 to move fast
but
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, but
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,
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apply
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 sometimes
results
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result
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 in
accidents
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which
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, which
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 is a major issue that can result in loss of
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people
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people's
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 lives.
However
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,
can
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it can
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 be addressed through educating the
people
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 about the dangers and
also
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 by bringing strict road laws.

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grammar
Fix many small errors. Use 'a' or 'an' before nouns. Use the right verb form after is/are. Make 'signage' plural to 'signs'. Keep each sentence short and clear.
structure
Make a clear plan. Start with a short intro that says what you will talk about. Then a body with each idea in one paragraph. End with a simple conclusion that sums up.
vocabulary
Use common words. Do not use long or hard words. If you use a new word, try to explain it with simple words.
content
Give one or two strong points for both the problem and the fix. Use only facts you can back up, or keep ideas simple. Do not use many numbers without proof.
punctuation
Use full stops and commas well. Start lines with a capital letter. Do not overuse 'etc.' or long link words.
content
The essay tries to talk about both problems and fixes for motorways.
structure
There is an intro and a conclusion, showing a plan.
coherence
There are real place examples used to support ideas.
Fully explain your ideas

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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