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It is becoming increasingly popular to have a year off between finishing school and going to university. What are the advantages and disadvantages for this?

#year #school #university
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students
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 take a gap
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 before applying to
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 will give them the chance to travel around the world and to have some work experiences.
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necessarily
 the best option. It is very common nowadays, that
students
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 wait for one
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 before applying to
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, allow them to have the chance to visit new countries, learning new languages or simply making new friends. Many teenagers
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, in order to cover their
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expences
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 for the months abroad. In fact, they work for the
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 six months trying to make some work experience while earning some money, especially if they do not receive any help from their parents. When they feel
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comfortable
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, even if these aforementioned reasons
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 having a
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 off, seems
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today's
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 world, there is
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high competition to get into the best universities and
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 the less famous
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 doing a selection with difficult exams to be able to apply.
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, many
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 that take a gap
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 often struggle to pass these tests because they need more time to study and focus for many hours.
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 who have suffered particularly, prefer to find a job
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 of
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 another
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 finding the way to be accepted in
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university
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. In conclusion, it is very common amongst
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 to have one
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 off before entering
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 comes with many benefits it is possible that for many of them would be a double edge sword.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gap year
  • work experience
  • internships
  • traveling
  • life experiences
  • personal development
  • independent
  • self-reliant
  • educational progress
  • graduation timeline
  • financial burden
  • academic momentum
  • structured academic environment
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