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Today’s teenagers have more stressful lives than previous generation. Discuss the view and give your opinion.

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Is it true that today’s youth spending more stressful
life
 as compared to the prior generation? I favour
this
 argument since not only parents’ expectations, but
also
 the competitive world put today’s generation into a more hectic
life
. A school of thought insists that parental
pressure
 on students increasing tension. According to them, every father dreamed that their children would be an engineer, a doctor, a civil servant, and so on, thereby; they are putting a burden on their offspring to meet the expectations.
Consequently
, youngsters have to study for more than 12 hours and do not have any time to relax their minds and end up with mental stress.
On the other hand
, older generations were mostly preferred to pursue their family business at that time; there is no mental
pressure
 of study.
For instance
, one of my friends, suffered from depression, after he failed in board exams and felt that he disappointed his peers.
Besides
 parents’ demands, the dream of living a luxurious
life
 leads to a stressful
life
.
This
 is because everyone wants to buy expensive items
such
 as a classy house, a big car, the latest digital products, and so on. To purchase all these products everyone is struggling more and working over-time.
Consequently
, teenagers feel
pressure
 to acquire these items.
This
 happened only in modern society; earlier generations were like to simple basic
life
. To exemplify, students working temporary along with their studies to buy an iPhone and taking unnecessary
pressure
 in their
life
. To recapitulate, academics performances and consumerism are powerful causes of stress in today’s teenagers.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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