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Some people say that all popular TV entertainment programmes should aim to educate viewers about important social issues. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#people #tv #entertainment #programmes #aim #viewers
Dear
Mr.
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 David My name is
Shoira
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Shira
, we met
in
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the
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airplane
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aeroplane
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 two days ago during the trip from New York to Tashkent. You mentioned
about
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some
avialable
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available
 job positions in one of your restaurants
that
is
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 scheduled to open in
Decemer
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December
 2018 in Samarkand city. I am very
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excited
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exited
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with
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this
 opportunity and would like to express my interest in the position of
restaurant
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the restaurant
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 manager. Let me tell you more details about my experience in
management
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 field. I have 15 years of hands-on experience in
restaurant
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 business. During all these years I have been working in Samarkand, which means that I know everything about local needs. I started my career as a waiter in one of the biggest restaurants in
Samarakand
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Samarkand
 - Karimbek. Very soon I was getting promoted, and 5 years ago I became a manager. Attached please find my CV with more detailed information about my education and experience. If you find skills and
experiece
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experience
 suitable, please contact me to schedule an interview. Yours sincerely
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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