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People tend to work longer hours nowadays. Working long hours has a negative effect on themselves, their family and the society so working long hours should be restricted. Do you agree or disagree.

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Working
overtime
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 for extra income at the workstation is becoming more popular ,
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, a good ratio of people argue that
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 can cause many problems in their life, family as well as on society. I completely agree that doing
overtime
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 at the workplace creates many problems
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, the government should set a limit on working hours. To embark on, I believe that taking
overtime
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 at work create more
stress
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 which has a direct impact on their life. When an employee spends excessive hours on the same desk in order to earn money and for promotion, a person becomes irritable due to
stress
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 and it disturbs his normal lifestyle.
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, in recent ,reports more than 70% employee gets
stress
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 due to
overtime
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 work and it leads to drastically change in his life. In short, getting more mental
stress
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 for working extra time is bad for family and society.
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, giving more time at the workstation
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 might increase problems in unemployment
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