Today, people can work and live in anywhere they want, because of the improvement of communication technology and transport. Do advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages.

Technology makes
a
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work easier for humans. Nowadays, they can work anywhere all over the world due to the advancement of communication technology and transportation. In my point of view, Its advantages outweigh the disadvantages. I will discuss a couple of advantages and disadvantages in the forthcoming paragraphs.
To begin
with, there are innumerable advantages of flexible working.
Firstly
,
people
have more choices to work globally due to technology.
People
in developing
countries
move
to the developed nations for a better lifestyle. It is
also
an asset for the developed
countries
. Migration booming the
economy
of developed
countries
.
Moreover
, many folks
move
to the developed
countries
for a better education which helps them to placed in reputed organization and can earn a handsome salary. They
helps
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their family by sending money back home.
For instance
, In Canada, the government provides better facilities to their
people
and some folks moving Canada for
the
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better earning. On the
the
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contrary,
this
trend
also
has some demerits.
Firstly
, the community that
move
to the developed
countries
are not connected with their culture. They forget their customs.
In addition
, some kids do not know their native language.
Secondly
, when
people
move
to
the
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developing
countries
economy
of developed nations degrade.
For instance
, In a survey found that 50000 students
move
to Canada for their studies and migration with
this
economy
of India decreases by 2%. Which really affects the developing state. To conclude, there are numerous merits and demerits of migration.
People
get
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better lifestyle and nice earning. But it affects the
economy
of developing
countries
.

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