Discipline is an ever increasing problem in modern schools. Some people think that discipline should be the responsibility of teachers while others think that this is the role of parents. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

Dear Sir or Madam I am writing with regard to your advertisement published on the company’s web page. Hereby, I would like to express my interest in the
position
of front-end developer in Japan. The main reason I would like to work in Japan is that I find it a good opportunity to exchange skills and experiences with overseas experts.
Additionally
,
this
position
would help me to improve my cultural intelligence and Japanese language skills;
thus
, I would be able to work with our Japanese partners in the future. Let me tell you some details regarding my education and experience. I graduated from the University of Western Columbia in 2019 with a degree in computer science. For the
last
2 years, I have been working in
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Engineering company in the
position
of a front-end developer. I was responsible for Shopify theme development. I feel that my experience makes me well suited for
this
position
. I consider myself to be hardworking, reliable and enthusiastic. If you find my skills suitable, please contact me to
further
schedule an interview. Yours faithfully,
Shoira
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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