In some cultures, children are often told that they can achieve anything if they try hard enough. šŸ”øWhat are the advantages and disadvantages of giving children this message?

It is true that some
are frequently told that if they try hard enough, they will get anything they want. But in some cases, telling them
is not always completely true, I believe there are two aspects within
behaviour. On the one hand, kids can gain advantages from the process of making efforts.
of all, once
message it encourages a desire to attain something, and
, try their best to reach their goals.
For example
, if a boy has an aspiration about obtaining a qualification that can make him enter into an elite junior high school, he will study hard enough,
, relating knowledge he can receive.
, it will nurture qualities
as diligence,
approach not only works on one level
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will be beneficial with a variety of actions in purchasing success.
On the other hand
sentence may act as a curse their whole lives.
, if
are convinced by the declaration that they will succeed as long as they devote enough endeavours, and they try it, but
fail, no doubt that they may be overcome by self-doubt, and not performing well enough may mentally torture them.
perhaps could lead to some mental and physical illness.
who can not get the result they have expected will not believe the function of struggling anymore, possibly resulting in allowing themselves to degenerate, which could have a long term effect on their future lives. In conclusion, the advantage of telling
they can succeed with hard work may be good for the confident child, but
in contrast
for a less than confident child to be told to do their best, but without any heavy pressure may be the best course of action.

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