Some people think single sex education is beneficial for children's development.Do you agree or disagree this statement and why?

As education is crucial
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21st
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century, many parents are confused about whether to send their children to
mixed
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mixed-gender
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gender
school
or
single
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gender
school
. I believe teaching them in
single
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gender
school
is more profitable for their future. On the one hand, some people believe that
seperating
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separating
both
sex
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would have some drawbacks when
students
are taught.
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is
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footstep
about
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social interaction. If they talk with
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same-sex
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same
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sex
, both of them could not understand each other and even have prejudices and stereotype due to
absence
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of communication.
In addition
, they who went to the one
gender
school
would suffer from hazards in making amicable social relationship in
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or
universary
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university
. In fact, some people who entered a work coexisted both
gender
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are
iclined
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inclined
to close
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sex
one.
Thus
, it would have
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of social ability.
On the other hand
, others argue strongly that educating
single
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sex
only would give
students
more benefits.At
first
, the most remarkable reason is
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environment. They don’t need to be conscious about
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sex
. In fact, many
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gender
school
’s
students
suffer from low concentration of their study and
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score(grade). It’s mainly because most young age groups
such
as adolescents are fascinated
in
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sexuality. So, it
make
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them distracted and not focused on their
school
life. That’s why if they study with
same
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gender
classmates, I assume they would concentrate on it and get many sakes. In conclusion,
although
single
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sex
education has some faults to
students
, I personally believe teaching them by dividing with two groups would be effective in achieving
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outcome and have more merits.
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