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Society is based on rules and laws. It could not function if individuals were free to do whatever they wanted to do. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Laws are made to protect the citizens and maintain peace in the community;
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, it is believed by some that through legislation their liberty is confined to a certain extent. It is my strong belief that no society can function smoothly without the guiding principles which are exercised for ideal conduct. Human nature is fallible. Since immemorial times, mankind had suffered due to the viciousness present in humans. Indian history had witnessed many bloody wars and manslaughter. The killing of innocents by the cruel rulers to satisfy their hunger for power exemplifies the destruction the human mind can cause if it is not controlled. The damage done to mankind through violence can not be reversed.
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, for the welfare of humanity, rules are implemented. Another reason to consider is the safety of the weak. The upper class of society has been oppressing and exploiting the lower section for a long time. Nowadays, it is evident in the form of rapes and crimes against women as the maximum number of the victims belong to the unprivileged section. But, after the inclusion of the ordinances for the weaker class in the legislation, the rate of crimes against
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 section of society is decreasing. The verdict given by the court in the “Nirbhaya” case is the finest example. In conclusion, to regulate the uncontrolled emotions within human beings, rules and regulations are framed and implemented. Not at any cost freedom of the public is compromised by these forces. So, we should sincerely abide by the rules made for the safety and welfare of the country. -
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