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Fast food is a part of life in many places. Some people think it has harmful ‎effects on lifestyle and diet. Do you agree or disagree? Give reasons.‎

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I strongly agree. Fast
food
 is a part of life in many places, and
as a result
, it leads ‎to harmful effects on lifestyle and diet. In its essay, I will give reasons for my ‎opinion.
First
, fast
food
 is made from low-quality ingredients, and fast
food
 is ‎tempting because it is an easy and quick alternative to healthy eating. ‎
Firstly
, components used to prepare fast
food
 are usually obtained from recycled ‎meats with added preservatives.
For example
, 'McDonald's' does not use fresh ‎meat for their hamburgers.
Thus
, it can cause unwanted effects
in
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 the human ‎body,
such
 as obesity.
Besides
, it may be worsened by increased intake. ‎
Moreover
, while it happens for meats, it
also
 occurs in other types of
food
such
 ‎as chips and desserts.
Although
 It is suitable for companies to save money, it is ‎unhealthy for society since it can induce diseases. ‎
Additionally
, even though It is the case, large populations choose its option ‎because of its convenience. To illustrate it, a person does not have time to prepare ‎organic
food
, so they select something like 'Burger King.'
Subsequently
, it ‎becomes part of their daily routine and is not beneficial. Meanwhile, addiction ‎may
also
 result, which can be detrimental. Plus, many companies like ‎‎'McDonalds' exist, and so accessibility is more readily available. ‎ In conclusion, poorly prepared fast foods may increase someone's weight to ‎unhealthy levels. As well as that, obtaining it regularly may cause somebody to be ‎addicted.
Therefore
, it is terrible for living and as a dietary selection. So, I ‎recommend cooking fresher foods that are much healthier. ‎
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