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Some people say it is important to keep your home and workplace tidy, with everything organised and in the correct place. Whats is your opinion on this?

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Cleanliness is
one
 of the important virtues in humans' life. Some
people
 believe that keeping your home and workplace clean hold
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great importance. I believe that it is absolutely true, as it
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 you
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 amount of benefits.
This
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 conclusion.
First
 of all, there are major psychological impacts of doing it. If you keep everything at a particular place and arrange it neatly, that give you
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 of satisfaction as well
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 vibes .
Moreover
 clean and clear surroundings help you to focus better.
As a result
,
one
's performance
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 greatly
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domestically or professionally.
Furthermore
 ,
one
 can do tasks easily, if everything is properly arranged like if you have a mess in your kitchen, it will take longer time to cook.
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Because
one
 needs to look for ingredients and needs to clean it. Another major reason for my opinion is health and
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 issues. As we are living in a pandemic age,hygiene is a more important part of our daily routine. If
people
 are using common things it needs to be cleaned , in order to prevent cross infections.
People
 can infect things unknowingly. Nowadays,
people
 are sharing things like calculator,
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 that may cause some infections.
For instance
, according to a survey of BBC news channel in
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 60% of children are less infected by infective digestive diseases, in whose homes kitchens and vessels are cleaned on daily basis
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 to the opposite group. To sum up, it can be concluded that, each and every human should spend some amount of time for hygiene at all places, not only at home and workplaces but everywhere ,as it helps you in different ways .
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