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Prison is the best punishment for criminals. Do you agree or disagree?

#prison #punishment #criminals
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Some people argue against capital
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 as they believe imprisonment is better, if not to say the best
punishment
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 for villains. I totally agree with the idea that the best
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 for
criminals
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 prison as my own perspective is that it forces them to experience both mental and physical sufferings, as well as guilt.  The
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 reason why I am on the side of
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 idea is that
prisons
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 make villains live in anguish. By staying in cramped and unhygienic rooms for years, they will be relieved of freedom.
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,
criminals
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 in
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 can be attacked by other prisoners;
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, they will suffer from physical pains which are regarded as what they must experience due to their misbehaviours in the past. Those mental and physical torments happening in
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 are the best
punishment
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 for
criminals
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. Another reason is that, not only in
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 but
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 when
criminals
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 are free, they will face challenges to reintegrate into the community because people are usually afraid of those who have criminal records.
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, they will find it difficult to seek jobs that affect their economic conditions, leading to a worse living standard;
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, they may be alone because rarely someone wants to make friends with
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. Only by having been behind bars,
criminals
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 can feel remorseful because if they had not committed a crime, they would not live in difficulties now. In conclusion, I strongly think that imprisoning
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 is the best
punishment
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.
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, I firmly suggest that
criminals
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 should be incarcerated in order to undergo anguish and guilt.
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