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SHOULD GOVERNMENT REGULATE THE FAST FOOD INDUSTRIES IN THE SAME WAY THAT REGULATES THE DRUG, ALCOHOL AND TOBACCO INDUSTRIES?

#government #food #industries #drug #alcohol #tobacco
It is prevailingly known that fast
food
 does harm to humans’ health so that
this
industry
 should be regulated compatibly with the
drug
,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 industries’ regulation.
This
 notion brings up multifaceted opinions in both agreement and opposition. Personally, I think the
fast
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food
industry
 is so different from the
other
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others
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 that the government should not regulate it in the same way as the
drug
,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 industries.
Firstly
, fast
food
 may cause negativity for health;
nevertheless
, it is not responsible for severe consequences in the same way as drugs,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 are. Those addictive substances are known to
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 a change in humans’ consciousness, resulting in uncontrollable thoughts and actions which lead to malfeasance.
On the other hand
, fast
food
 is not detrimental to mental health; in some circumstances, it even does good to people by making them feel satisfied when consuming delicious meals which,
thus
, produces positive energy.
For example
, a person eating McDonald feels pleasant as he can finish an appetizing meal and save time. Some advocates may argue that despite the fast
food
’s minimal harm, the policy should be conducted so as to eliminate as many risks as possible.
However
, once the government applies the method of regulating the
drug
,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 industries on the
fast
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food
industry
’s management, it will strongly be affected. It is not worthwhile to make great lengths to oversee
such
 an
industry
 producing hardly any severity. Not only is
this
 regulation nominal, but it
also
 induces extravagance of the governmental financial budget.
Consequently
, it will transgress other aspects; namely, allowances for education or medicine are now distributed to a trivial task. In conclusion, the
fast
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food
industry
 should not be regulated in the same way as the government does to the
drug
,
alcohol
, and
tobacco
 industries.
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