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all education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Education
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 and
healthcare
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 both are important sectors for public development. Many countries
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 free services for everyone because the
government
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 provide funds to them. I partially agree with
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 statement and in the forthcoming ,paragraphs I shall analyze my viewpoint on
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To begin
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 with, in every country, the
government
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 take a few amounts of
money
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 from
people
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' salary as a tax. These taxes are taken according to their wages and the officials use in the public and private sector for the welfare of society and the country.
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, it is the
government
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 duty to give free
education
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 and
healthcare
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 facilities to the community and
also
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 provide funds to these sectors so that they can buy some useful material for them.
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, for developing countries,
education
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 and
healthcare
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 are the fundamental nation builders. If these two sectors are well established
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 they can achieve higher goals in future.
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,
people
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 need
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education
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 to get a job in society. While
,
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 they get it free from the
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then
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 they can graduate and get a good position in the community
then
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 give taxes to the
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. Indirectly, the
money
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 used for the public by the
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, in the future
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money
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 come back to the
government
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 in the form of taxes. On the flip side, some
people
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 take advantage of
government
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 funds. They show the requirement of the kind of material in their sector and does not use it. They play a huge bluff against the
government
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 and its affects the local
people
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.
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, a student who gets free
education
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 from the officials does not study well in the school. Most of the time they are busy with their friends. They spoil
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that is
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 funded by the
government
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. To conclude, free
education
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 and
healthcare
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 are the crucial steps in every country. More
people
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 educated, more benefit for the
government
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.

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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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