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all education and healthcare should be funded by the government and free for everyone. to what extend do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#education #healthcare #government
Education
 and
healthcare
 both are important sectors for public development. Many countries
provides
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 free services for everyone because the
government
 provide funds to them. I partially agree with
this
 statement and in the forthcoming ,paragraphs I shall analyze my viewpoint on
this
.
To begin
 with, in every country, the
government
 take a few amounts of
money
 from
people
' salary as a tax. These taxes are taken according to their wages and the officials use in the public and private sector for the welfare of society and the country.
Therefore
, it is the
government
 duty to give free
education
 and
healthcare
 facilities to the community and
also
 provide funds to these sectors so that they can buy some useful material for them.
Moreover
, for developing countries,
education
 and
healthcare
 are the fundamental nation builders. If these two sectors are well established
then
 they can achieve higher goals in future.
For instance
,
people
 need
the
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education
 to get a job in society. While
,
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 they get it free from the
government
then
 they can graduate and get a good position in the community
then
 give taxes to the
government
. Indirectly, the
money
 used for the public by the
government
, in the future
this
money
 come back to the
government
 in the form of taxes. On the flip side, some
people
 take advantage of
government
 funds. They show the requirement of the kind of material in their sector and does not use it. They play a huge bluff against the
government
 and its affects the local
people
.
Furthermore
, a student who gets free
education
 from the officials does not study well in the school. Most of the time they are busy with their friends. They spoil
money
that is
 funded by the
government
. To conclude, free
education
 and
healthcare
 are the crucial steps in every country. More
people
 educated, more benefit for the
government
.
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