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The below gives information about the underground railway systems in six ‎cities.‎

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The table shows data about the underground rail networks in six major cities.‎ The table compares the six networks in terms of their age, size and the number of people who use them ‎each
year
. It is clear that the three oldest underground systems are larger and serve significantly more ‎passengers than the newer systems.‎ The London
underground
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 is the oldest
system
, having opened in 1863. It is
also
 the largest
system
, with 394 ‎
kilometers
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 of route. The
second largest
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system
, in Paris, is only about half the size of the London ‎underground, with 199
kilometers
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 of route.
However
, it serves more people per
year
. While only
third
 in ‎terms of size, the Tokyo
system
 is easily the most used, with 1927 million passengers per
year
.‎ Of the three newer networks, the Washington DC underground is the most extensive, with 126
kilometers
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 ‎of route, compared to only 11
kilometers
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 and 28
kilometers
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 for the Kyoto and Los Angeles systems. The Los ‎Angeles network is the newest, having opened in 2001, while the Kyoto network is the smallest and serves ‎only 45 million passengers per
year
.‎
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