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Nowadays, animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favor of them because of other benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Human needs have exceeded
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 limit over a period of time.
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 of
people
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 are eye to eye with the fact of using wildlife as lab rats to
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 their desires,
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however
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 there are
people
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 who completely dissent
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 actions. I will discuss both views of the statement and provide my opinion towards the end of the essay. In recent years,epidemic and pandemic
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 led the human brain to be more inquisitive. Scientists and researchers have always contributed
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 the field of technology by developing
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vaacines
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vaccines
vaccine
 and medicines to protect the crowd from deadly diseases.
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 discoveries were only possible by taking advantage of the existence of
animals
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. Mankind is the most powerful creature alive, and it is agreeable that it is against law to conduct experiments on humans. Wildlife and natural resources are existent on earth, for humans to consume according to their needs. Using
animals
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 like rats, cats and monkeys for live experiments
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benifited
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benefited
 researchers in identifying the spread of
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disease earlier than usual. The practice of animal exploitation has led to
discovery
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the discovery
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 of antibiotics against diseases like plague, tuberculosis and jaundice.
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,
in contrast
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 to the
exteme
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extreme
 profit caused by using
animals
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 in
research
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 field, some
people
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 are strongly
opinonated
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opinionated
 to ban the use of
livestocks
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livestock
 in experiments. It is true that when medications are injected
animals
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 undergo pain leading to physical changes in their body. Sometimes causing worse effects to them, like stroke and death. Animal protection organisations like Blue cross
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this
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 is
a
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violent behaviour to
animals
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 and that government should take necessary steps to stop
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 from happening. To conclude, though
people
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 are proud
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 the discovery of modern medicines, I opine towards curbing, caging and killing
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creatures for the prosperity of the nation. I think scientists must work towards finding alternatives
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 of harming
animals
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