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The internet has become profoundly efficient and popular that people choose it as a platform to learn. Some believe that it would eventually replace the need for books. Do you agree or disagree?

#internet #people #platform #believe #books
With the
adavacement
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advancement
 of technology and easy
accessibilty
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accessibility
of
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 the
internet
 , learning over the
internet
 has become efficient. It has
plethora
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 of sources to offer
an information
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information
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 on any topic. I agree that
eventually
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 the
internet
 learning will replace
books
. Analysing the success of
existing
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 ebook market and efficient and vast source of learning through the
internet
 will help bolster
this
.
Firstly
 , most of the
books
 available in the market has
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 ebook version available on the
internet
.
For
instance
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 most of the
ecommerce
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eCommerce
e-commerce
 sites have a special kindle edition for purchase, which is a booming business. With
this
 flexibility to go through a book online without the hassle of waiting for a physical book , it makes ebooks more famous.
Therefore
 , learning over the
internet
 can replace
the
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traditional book learning.
Secondly
 , the vast information present on the
internet
 about any topic makes it much favourable for learning.
For instance
 ,
internet
 learning is not only confined to ebooks but
also
 video lectures and various other media types which
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 learning interesting. Sadly , these vast platforms of learning are lacked by the
books
.
Hence
internet
 learning will eventually replace
books
 . In the nutshell, with the existing ebook market and
distuinguished
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distinguished
distinguishes
 platforms for learning over the
internet
, the audience for
books
 will keep on
dimnishing
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diminishing
finishing
.
Internet
 will
further
 provide better ways for learning and can reach the masses.
Hence
books
 will be replaced by
internet
 learning.
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