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Online learning is better than classroom learning. Do you agree?

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It is true that the contributions of modern technologies are affecting every aspect of our lives including the way we study and teach. Online
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 popular nowadays
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 its convenience. In
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 essay, I will discuss the pros and cons of remote
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. Learning remotely has manifold benefits for an individual.
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, online lessons are extremely flexible.
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, we can purchase courses and study anytime we want;
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, we have more freedom to balance career and
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.
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, it is possible to learn remotely from anywhere with internet access in any educational platform or university around the globe. To illustrate, before, students had to go to England if they wanted to get a British degree;
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 option was less attractive
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 people with a limited budget. As it follows, learning online is cost-effective and time-efficient.
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, studying remotely requires great motivation and discipline. Alternatively, in-person
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 can offer better social skills.
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, if students study in one group and see each other every day, their interpersonal skills
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 fostered. Clearly, social skills have vital importance
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 our careers and mental health.
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, it is impossible to learn
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 subjects as medicine and engineering, because the emphasis is on practical not theory.
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 should not be neglected.
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, both methods of learning have advantages,
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 is difficult to prove that one is better than the other.
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, I believe that everyone should learn how to balance online and classroom
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 in order to benefit from both of them.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a balanced discussion of both online and classroom learning. To further strengthen your task response, try to address more specific points about how each method affects different types of learners.
coherence cohesion
While the logical structure is good, you could improve coherence by using more varied linking phrases. This would make your essay flow even more smoothly.
overall
Make sure to proofread your essay for minor grammatical errors and clarity, such as in the last sentence where it should be "and classroom education" instead of "and classroom educations."
coherence cohesion
Your essay contains a clear introduction and conclusion, which frames your argument well.
task achievement
The ideas presented are clear and comprehensive, covering multiple aspects of the topic.
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Specific examples, such as the reference to getting a British degree, effectively support your points.
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