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In developed countries people are preferring more and more private cars. What are the impact of it? Discuss your views.

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Private
vehicles
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 keep on increasing as the world is progressing because everyone wants their own car which may have severe impacts on our life and environment. There will be more noise and air
pollution
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 due to the increased number of wheels on the roads as well as
traffic
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 congestion in metropolitan areas. In the modern world flow of money has increased a lot due to the development in technology and
vehicles
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 and other luxury items are being cheaper day by day. Because of
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, private car is in everyone’s access and people are buying them to fulfil their daily needs. Due to the increased number of individual
vehicles
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 in big cities,
traffic
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 congestion is being increased which can have devastating effects on resident’s lives. Pedestrians cannot walk on the streets due to heavy
traffic
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 and chances of accidents keep on increasing in residential areas which may take anyone’s life very easily. More
traffic
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 in city centres can
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 create different health issues.
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, more
vehicles
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 can destroy our environment by creating air
pollution
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 with fumes emerging from the exhaust of internal combustion engines in cars.
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 carbon-containing smoke is prevailing everywhere in the atmosphere of the developed cities and is one of the reasons for cancer creating elements.
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, noise
pollution
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 is causing damaging effects on the hearing of human beings as well as birds and animals which can damage our ecosystem. Having considered the above discussion, it can be concluded that the luxury choices of people like individual cars are creating negative consequences on people’s daily life as well as devastating our environment and eco-system due to air and noise
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