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Some feel that animal testing is cruel while others feel it is necessity. Discuss both opinions and give your opinion

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Testing of
medicines
 and cosmetics on
animals
 has been prevalent for a very long time . The
animals
 are tortured and deprived of their natural habitats in
order
 to
test
 these products . While some believe it is cruel to
test
medicines
 on them others argue that it is the only way in
order
 to save mankind from ever-increasing diseases and viruses. It's important to analyse the two opinions in
order
 to come to a conclusion. There are people and NGO's who feel that testing
medicines
 on
animals
 not only deprives them of their natural habitat but
also
 puts them in life-threatening situation.
For instance
 , to
test
 certain specific
medicines
 certain species are made to go through various emotions. These
animals
 are over-worked and
also
 at times cut off food so as to
test
 them in extreme conditions. In case an animal can't take the adverse environment created during these medical
tests
 and tend to lose control , it can
also
 be killed. Life should be valued irrespective of it belongs to an animal or a human.
Thus
 animal testing should be totally avoided.
On the contrary
 , certain people feel that these animal
tests
 are a necessity. It's a long process to come up with new life-saving medicine and in
order
 to expedite the process, animal testing is important. Certain members of the medical fraternity feel that most of these clinical trials are safe and are part of a later stage of testing. In the absence of these
tests
 , saving human life from new and unknown diseases becomes difficult.
Hence
 in
order
 to protect humanity from life-threatening diseases ,controlled animal testing is important. In my opinion , looking at the adversities caused by these
tests
 on
animals
 , animal testing should be banned. During the various stages of these testing , the
animals
 go through various induced emotions which tortures them.
Also
, other testing alternatives
such
 as "In vitro testing" where human cells and tissues are modelled , should be explored.
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