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some people think that young people should choose their professions themselves. others believe that their parents should choose for them. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Choosing a
profession
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 is one of the hardest things to decide since there are lots of factors that needed to be considered.
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, some
people
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 argue that a person’s career path, especially by young
people
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, must be left in the hands of their
parents
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 rather than by themselves. In my own opinion,
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parents
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 know what’s best for their offspring, I still believe that their
children
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 should be the ones to pick their
profession
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. Almost all parent’s wish is for their
children
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 to be successful in
life
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. They tend to actively involve themselves in selecting the
profession
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 their
children
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 in the future. They try to influence their
children
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 in taking up courses that can provide them financial stability like medicine and engineering regardless if the child desires it or not.
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,
parents
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 believe that young
people
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 lack the capacity to make a decision since they have not gained enough
life
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 experiences yet.
Parents
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 fear that their offspring might end up choosing a career
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 not suitable for them.
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, they just pick a
profession
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 they believe can give them a better
life
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.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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 believe that young
people
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 should choose their
profession
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 for the following reasons.
Firstly
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, even at a young age they already have an idea about their passion in
life
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 and letting them follow their dreams will lead them to success.
People
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 tend to work hard if they like what they are doing
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 of just doing it because someone commanded them.
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, they will feel happy and satisfied if given a chance to decide for themselves. They will be more productive and they can maintain good mental health.
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, they can avoid possible depression and burn-out if from the very beginning they are pursuing their passion. In my conclusion, deciding about the future of someone must come from the person himself rather than other
people
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.
Parents
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 might know the practical
profession
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 that can sustain their
children
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’s financial status, but their
children
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’s
aware
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 of the things that can make them happy and satisfied by pursuing their own passion.
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