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Online learning is better than classroom learning. Do you agree?

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Nowadays, It is a hotly debated topic that e-learning has more benefits than traditional learning. In my opinion, both have their own merits and demerits.
This
 essay will discuss it in the forthcoming paragraphs.
Firstly
, I will discuss the pros of online learning. It provides flexible
time
 to learn. One can attend the class anytime when he gets free
time
. It saves the commute
time
 and fuel. One can make his own choice course
at
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 any corner of the world.
For instance
,
Last
 year,
due to
lockdown
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 I was unable to attend
the
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apply
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college so I
prefer
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 e-learning and did
the
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a
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 course
of
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 data science. So, it is beneficial for everyone. There are some drawbacks to e-learning.
Students
 do not interact with their teachers and fellow mates.
Students
 have a lack of team spirit.
On the other hand
, classroom learning has its own benefits
such
 as more interaction among
students
 and teachers, pupils can participate in curricular and co-curricular activities. It enhances social skills among scholars. There are some cons of traditional learning
is
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 that It takes much
time
 to
commuting
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 and
use
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 fuel to commute. Traditional learning is
also
 not safe these days
due to
 the covid19 pandemic. So most
students
 prefer e-learning.
To conclude
, In my opinion,
this
 trend has its own advantages and disadvantages.
Submitted by Rajwinder Kaur on

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clear comprehensive ideas
Try to expand on each point with more detailed explanations or examples. This will help you achieve a clearer and more comprehensive response.
introduction conclusion present
While you have a conclusion, try to summarize the specific points you discussed to reinforce your arguments.
logical structure
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear central idea and that these ideas contribute to the overall argument of the essay.
complete response
You've made a clear attempt to address both the pros and cons of online and classroom learning.
relevant specific examples
Your use of personal examples makes your essay more relatable and engaging.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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