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Higher education could be funded in three ways. All costs paid by government, all costs paid by students or students paying all costs through a government loan. What are the advantages of these choices?

Higher
education
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 is important for both individuals and society as it enables individuals to pursue a more satisfying job and better life and provides society with a more innovative and productive workforce,
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 it can cost a large amount of money.
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 who should pay for it is a question worth considering. The three given options, government paying all costs, self-supporting, and
students
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 paying the cost through government
loans
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 will be discussed in
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 essay in terms of their advantages.
Governments
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 paying all the fees can ensure all qualified high school graduates the opportunity to receive higher
education
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 and to pursue a better life through it, irrespective of their economic conditions.
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, people from low-income families can attend universality without paying
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 find jobs with high salaries after
education
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 and improve their living standards. An obvious advantage of
students
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 paying the cost by themselves is that
governments
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’ financial burden will be eased. As they can save money on
education
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, the budget can allow more money to be spent on other urgent public affairs,
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 as poverty, health security, or unemployment. Paying through low-interest
loans
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 from
governments
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 certainly lessens
students
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’ stress, compared to the
second
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 option. Undergraduates do not have to do part-time to support themselves while studying but can pay off the
loans
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 later after being full-time employed.
This
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 option will not cause too much financial difficulty for
governments
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 either, as they can expect the repayment of the
loans
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 and even a small amount of interest. In summary,
students
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 paying by themselves could motivate them to study hard but may harm
education
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 equality.
Governments
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 paying tuition fees is best for
students
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’ welfare but burdens itself. In comparison, offering
loans
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 is a compromised and most feasible way to supports
students
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 to embrace higher
education
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.

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