Some people say that arts subjects such as painting or drawing should not be made compulsory for high school students. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?
There are many people who think that craft
subjects
are to be made mandatory in the syllabus . I completely agree with the statement ,and in the ,
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One of the many benefits of the necessary incorporation of these courses is that stress could be reduced. This
is because the activities that involve drawing aids in the release of a particular hormone that is
responsible for happiness. For instance
, it is advised by doctors to spend 15 minutes a day doing these tasks as it will impart serenity in one's soul. Furthermore
, indulging in these subjects
will help the youth to maintain the excessive pressure in life.
Additionally
, the imagination of the minors could be enhanced and it will present lucrative opportunities in the future for them. While drawing they have to see vividly through the mind's eye before drawing something, and this
will increase their power of imagining things more efficiently and it will open their doors towards success. Such
as, almost all individual that has this
attribute, needless to ,say what they have achieved in the short time period.
In conclusion, making the art subjects
compulsory will have various benefits such
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should be the case as If I would have been fortunate enough to get exposed to these subjects
I will definitely be at a higher intellectual status than now.Submitted by sanjay.kapil on
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