Few people devote time to hobbies nowadays. Say why you think this is the case and what effect this has on the individual and society in general. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Hobby
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is an important form of activity
which
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that
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can bring happiness and comfort to mankind during their leisure
time
;
however
, there is only a minority of
people
who completely spend
time
on it. There
seems
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to be some reasons why and a variety of damage effects on each person and the group of community, which we will discuss here. Probably, the main factor is the issue of lacking
time
. Because of the upswing in the economy, many
people
make an effort to work and study to afford the cost in their daily life.
Therefore
, they spend most of their
time
on
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making money and knowledge, reducing their recreation
time
, leading to high chances of being exhausted and less interested in hobbies.
Moreover
, due to the development of technology,
people
seem addicted to the Internet and electronic devices. Little by little, the
time
for what they are truly keen on has declined. Less
devoting
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to hobbies may cause a huge number of problems. For individually, should the
time
for pursuit and relaxation be limited, there will be a downswing in dopamine (hormone of happiness) in our body, causing a higher rate of psychological issues, likely to decrease work performances.
In addition
, unless
people
keep passionately using technology , their health problems (
diabete
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diabetes
, short-sightedness, visual impairments) can easily be healed.
For instance
, according to a survey, 70
percent
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of students in a province of Vietnam have short-sightedness because of using technical devices for a long
time
. For society, not spending
time
on some entertainment activities can lead to a limit in social networks.
Moreover
, the economy can be affected negatively resulting in the falling productivity of an organization. In conclusion, we see that being too busy and wasting
time
on the internet are the main reasons
,
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and that the effect on both each person and community are worse by health problems and the economy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Devote time
  • Hobbies
  • Nowadays
  • Busy
  • Fast-paced
  • Lifestyles
  • Work and career
  • Technology
  • Digital entertainment
  • Limited
  • Free time
  • Lack of motivation
  • Mental wellbeing
  • Physical wellbeing
  • Decreased
  • Social interactions
  • Creativity
  • Self-expression
  • Negative effects
  • Society
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