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many government think economic progress is their most important goal. some people, however, think that other types of progress are equally important for a country. discuss both view and give your opinion.

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Economic plays an important part in our life, so many
government
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governments
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 think to make a progress
whith
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with
which
 the economic’s goal, while some
people
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 argue that there are many types of progress has
same
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the same
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velue
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value
 of importance for the
country
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. I
definietly
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definitely
 agree with the
fisrt
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first
 statement about we have to increase our
economic’s
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economy’s
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 goal which has a huge impact
to
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on
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 our life. Economic has a big
roll
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role
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 in a
country
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,
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economy
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the economy
an economy
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 can
makes
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make
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 a
country
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 has many resources and build
many
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much
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construction
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constructions
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.
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Furthermore
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 the condition of
Economy
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 in a
country
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 will invite many investors for
other
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another country
other countries
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country
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 to invest their money for a big contribution to develop a
country
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.
Besides
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people
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 usually think that
economy
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 has the
first
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 major problem for society in a
country
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for
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 example,
people
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 who don’t have much money usually think to do crimes like thief or robbery to get more money.
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 to get investors from
other
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another country
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country
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 to build
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country’s
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the country’s
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development
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. Government can make a huge impact
from
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by
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 growing
a
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the
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 number of citizens to invest in
stocks
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the stocks
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 market of that
country
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 to build a
country
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.
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However
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 some
people
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 argue that
economic
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economics
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 is not the biggest program to develop a
country
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, some
people
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 looking for many aspects that can build a
country
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 has
an
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apply
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amazing progress. One of the
solution
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solutions
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 to
buld
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build
 a
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country’s
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development
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 is
in
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apply
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educations.
People
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 in the
country
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 which has a great background from their education has a great
roll
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role
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 in their society’s life.
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example
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people
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 who take
an
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education from the best university in the world will
has
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have
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 a bigger implication like make a company who can build
society
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a society
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 in a
country
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 has
better
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the better
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 ability and
a
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skill to
faced
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face
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 the problem,
onthe
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on the
 other hand
people
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 who take
a
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education from a usual university only think to become a worker in a big company or just become
an
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a
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 usual
entrepreuners
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entrepreneurs
. To sum up,
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Economy
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the Economy
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 has a major impact
to
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on
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country’s
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a country’s
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development
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,
economic
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economy
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 will makes
country
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 become richer than before if a
country
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 has
much investor
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many investors
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 to build a
country
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 better, in
fact
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 governments
also
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 can’t blind
with
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to
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others
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other
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 factor that can build a
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country’s
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development
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. Like
educations
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the educations
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 of their society.
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  • stakeholder
  • sustainable development
  • public sector
  • non-governmental organization (NGO)
  • civic engagement
  • green technology
  • quality of education
  • universal healthcare
  • cultural integrity
  • global competitiveness
  • human capital
  • innovation ecosystem
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