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what is homelessness? what are the reasons for the homeless people

#homelessness #people
Now a days
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 one of the most significant
issue
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is
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is sheltered
is sheltering
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shelter
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shelterless
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less
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people
 which
having
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profound
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 impact on our modern society. In
this
essay
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 I will examine the various causes for
this
 situation. Perhaps, homelessness is one of the critical
situation
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 for a person or family.
Nevertheless
 , along with
home
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the home
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itself
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 there will be uncertainty for food, water, medicine and so on.
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people
life
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lives
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 in danger
at
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 various part of the world. There are few reasons which
contributing
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make
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the
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people
 homeless.
First
 and one of the main reason is political unrest which eventually
compel
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 the
resident
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run
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 away from their
home
. Recent news
say
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 that
,
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 about 80% of
people
 lost their house during the war between Turkey and Iran. Another reason, sudden
losing
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 of jobs due to any natural calamities or disaster.
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 , news report
say
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, during the corona pandemic small and medium job holders
were left
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have left
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 the city as they lost their existing job. Once
people
 having
financial
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a financial
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 crisis
then
first
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the first
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 thing
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that come
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come
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in
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to
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 their mind to sell the house,
Therefore
home
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the home
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 goes out for
the
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food. In conclusion, I would say, the government authority should take care of homeless citizen and everyone has
same
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 right to be facilitated with basic needs like
home
, food, health and education.
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