Some people think that it is better to participate in sports that are played in teams, such as soccer, while others believe that participation in individual sports, such as tennis or swimming, is better. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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sports became
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life.as we know some sports depends on
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of players like basketball while other one player is enough like golf.in
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will discuss both
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then
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will draw my personal opinion. On one hand,some people argue
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game that consists
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persons is more beneficial.
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,it's better because it has a high level of competition ,to illustrate in my
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team
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thay
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to take the position.
furthermore
,you can meet and make
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new friends in the stadium.
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pest
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friend.
On the Other hand
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tennis
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Federer
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some advantages like it's less injury than when you play within
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.to
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make
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Federer
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you will take more than if you with
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.
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and you win on champions and the prize was 1000SR you will get 100Sr while if
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alone you will
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it all. In conclusion,after careful analysis of both
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i
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suggests the played on
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more
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better than when you play individual.
also
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advice
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you to let your children play with
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to be dependent on
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him self
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on
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the future.
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