Some people believe that teaching children at home is best for a child's development while others think that it is important for children to go to school. Discuss the advantages of both methods and give your own opinion.

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's growth. A section of society asserts that homeschooling is best for the growth of

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role in everyone's life. They must be sent to

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essay will elucidate both arguments in the subsequent paragraph with my opinion in the conclusion. There are several

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of people who consider there are several

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learn basic traits from home. Which not only make them obedient but

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of students perform

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in exams who studies at home as they

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guide them to cope with the difficulties. It ultimately

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their bond strong.

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,a child's development

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on what he is taught in

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learn team building activities in

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.As they study and play

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activities

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which develop sharing among all.

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to gain

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practical knowledge which is very helpful to deal with

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situations. In conclusion, after study both the arguments and

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, it is established that child should

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at home for basic development.

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to meet the

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conditions they must be sent to

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

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Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Tailored learning
peer pressure
flexibility
instill values
socialization
communication skills
specialized facilities
extracurricular activities
diversity
structured environment
customized education
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