Some parents believe that learning maths at school is redundant and should not be taught. while others believe that it should remain a foundation subject. Discuss both views and give your opinion
Some parents sometimes argue that teaching
of
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math
basics is time-wasting and should be eliminated from the school's curriculum, whereas
others assume that it is one of the most important areas that need to be maintained. Although
both opinions have their sets of advantages, I agree that learning maths is fundamental to youngsters' nurturing.
Many parents disagree with the idea of math
education at school. Firstly
, they believe it can wait until college and the government can take into account more important subjects. It has been taught that chemistry and biology are paramount of importance and they have to be replaced instead
of math
classes. Secondly
, manifold experts proved that youngsters usually do not give their attention to learning these difficult courses and some non-academic lessons can be added to teach math
indirectly. Finally
, computers have covered all aspects of our lives and they will enhance more and more in the future, hence
math
is an area that can be done with the help of technology and robots and it is not crucial as as
other aspects.
On the other side, a large section of adults Remove the redundancy
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To begin
with, they think kids' development will not be completed without learning math
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the young
as well as
widens their knowledge regarding many things. Additionally
, starting to learning
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learn
math
should be started at schools and it will continue till end
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the end
For example
, scientists conducted several studies that showed university students who were not sophisticated in this
subject, had different kinds of problem solving
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problem-solving
Therefore
, it is needless to say that obtaining math
is the greatest part of our kids
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kids'
prepration
for life.
In conclusion, Correct your spelling
preparation
although
many families are against math
teching
at schools, the benefits of Correct your spelling
teaching
this
area are by no means negligible and I am the
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career and need to be presented at education system of my country.Submitted by farzin_seyednejad on
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