‘Details of politicians’ private lives should not be published in newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Newspapers should not publish personal details of politicians. I completely agree with
this
statement as
this
might cause dangerous threats not only to them but
also
to their entire family members.
Also
, knowing about their personal lives might damage
politician
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careers. Publishing political
leaders
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personal details will create dangerous threats from opponent leaders or terrorists by attacking them when they are out. In order to fulfil their ,needs they might even attack
politicians'
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or their families.
This
is
due to
the media publishing his information like which place they go for jogging in the morning or which school his children go to.
For example
, YS. Jagan Mohan Reddy, Chief
Ministers
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of Andhra Pradesh, uncle got killed before state elections to threaten him not to participate in the elections.
Also
, they injured his left arm when he was taking a morning walk. CBI proved that a local magazine recently published an article before
this
incident, completely about him and his family whom he
closely
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is with. Not only is there a threat to politicians' lives but
also
would damage their
career
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by posting their personal photos of having alcohol during
his
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family
party
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. People who follow him might not like his habits.
Therefore
this
might impact future elections
while
voting for him as a leader.
For example
, The Hindu newspaper published an article about Narendra Modi Prime Minister of India that he ran away the night he got married and his wife's photos too.
After
this
news was published it affected his follower’s count on social media. Many opponents had trolled him after knowing
this
.
To conclude
, politician
personals
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should not be published because it is a risk to their lives as they go through threats.
In addition
to
this
, it will affect their career if their personal life is revealed to the public as their fans might not like.
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