below show the school site in 2004 and the plan for changes to the school site in ‎‎2024.‎

These two maps illustrate the
school
site in 2004 and the plan for changes to the
school
site in 2024. Overall, the construction layout of the
school
site would have some undergo noticeable changes in the future years. In 2004, after entering the main entrance, it is
easily
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to found a
path
separate
the
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apply

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school
building 1 and
school
building 2. And keep walking
alone
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along

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the
path
, we can approach the sports
filed
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field

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. But it has a big difference in 2024, a passage which used to connect two original buildings would be added and the
path
would be cut off by
this
passage. At the end of the
path
, the sports field would be replaced by a
school
building 3. At the right of the
school
building 3, it will set up a new
car
parking place and get a
newly
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path
to connect the
car
park 2 and the old
car
park. What’s more,
near
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nearby

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by
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the
car
park, a new sports field would be established which smaller than the
last
one.

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