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The way in which a
town
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 was changed after the construction of a hydroelectric power dam between 1990 and 2010 is illustrated in the given maps. Overall, the riverbank
town
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 which was more or less like a village had transformed into a commercial
town
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 during
this
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 period. In 1990, the
river
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 which flowed from South to North bisected the
town
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. Towards the left of the
river
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, there was an ancient structure. Mountains and forests were
also
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 there with some rare plants and animals. Towards its right, there was a village and an irrigated farmland. After the construction of the dam, in 2010, the
town
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 looked entirely different. The flow of the
river
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 was interrupted and an artificial lake was constructed towards the North of the
town
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. The ancient structure was demolished, and the farmland was abandoned for the lake. Forests were cleared, and
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 the wildlife disappeared. A large hotel was constructed towards the right of the lake, and the village was relocated towards the extreme South of the
river
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 bank. Large engineering structures are
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 seen on either side of the
river
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, which supplied power to other areas.
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