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Your company has recently introduced a new uniform for the staff. But you have learned that the staff members are not happy about it. Write a letter to your manager about it. In your letter, * explain why you think the staffs are not happy with the new uniform * what you want the new uniform to be like * and give some suggestions to handle the situation

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Dear Sir or Madam, I trust you are doing well. The purpose of
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 letter is to express dissatisfaction with the new
uniform
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 for the staff. First and foremost, the pink colour of the
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 is not suitable for
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most of the employees.
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 that, the full-sleeve t-shirts are not practical to work
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 to health and safety reasons on the production floor.
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, the
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 should be revised and should be in either Blue or Black colour.
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, the polo t-shirt without pockets is preferable
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 anything else for everyone as it will allow employees to work without any
restictions
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 to work quickly. From my perspective, the
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 solution until all employees receive their newly proposed uniforms should be to allow us to wear casual clothes. 
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 but not least, workers should not be
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responsible
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 for
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 new
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. I hope that you will take all necessary steps to resolve issues with the new
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 design. Thank you for your support. Sincerely, Ruchin Patel

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To improve the logical structure, consider having a clear introductory paragraph and separate your points more distinctly. This will further enhance clarity and flow.
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For a complete response, detailed suggestions on handling potential employee concerns through discussions or meetings could be included.
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The greeting and closing are appropriately polite and suitable for formal communication.
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The writing tone is courteous and respectful, demonstrating good awareness of formal letter-writing conventions.

Structure your letter

A letter needs to be written using a proper format, including the following:

  • A greeting (Dear sir/madam, Dear John, Dear Mr. Smith)
  • The main body (consisting of paragraphs for each part of the letter)
  • A closing (Yours sincerely, Yours faithfully, Best wishes, Kind regards, Love)

When writing a letter as part of the IELTS General Training Writing Task 1, it is important to include the bullet points presented to you in the question.

All three bullet points need to be presented. And remember that some bullet points contain more than one element. So, make sure to watch for ‘and’ and plurals.

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