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Overpopulation of urban areas has led to numerous problems. Identify one or two serious ones and suggest ways that governments and individuals can tackle these problems.

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There is no doubt that population has increased sharply in
cities
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, it is important to consider that with it comes a lot of challenges. In
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 and foremost, one of the main
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 associated with
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 overpopulation of
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 is the traffic.
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 is because
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, the population in the
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 is bursting and to exacerbate the traffic
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 every person now owns a car or even two of them.
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,
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 are stuck in jams for hours without even moving an inch. To illustrate
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 time, a study conducted in the USA reports , to travel from North Dakota to South Dakota takes about 15 hours by car which is enormous for the
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 too close, yet the time taken is more, due to roadblocks caused by the huge amount of cars.
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, the authorities should immediately increase the taxes on cars, so that
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 who didn't need one should not buy.
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, with many
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 flocked in
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 they produce a lot of garbage, and recklessly spread it in the
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.
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 a
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 because they use daily life stuff, and throw it in streets or sometimes in rivers too, as there is no action taken towards these peoples.
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, In ,India the waste items can be seen by naked eyes lying around and nobody cares even the
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 who are in the power. One solution to completely eradicate
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problem
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 is, to place a heavy fine on
people
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 who are conducting these type of activities. As a consequence, the city will look more appealing, and the tourism economy can
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 be boosted. In conclusion, a gathering of many
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 in
cities
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 poses many problems
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 roads and waste products thrown away. The government should devise a way to look into
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, and they could even take a shot at my solutions.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • strain on infrastructure
  • public services
  • overcrowded
  • inadequate healthcare services
  • pressure on educational institutions
  • environmental impact
  • increased pollution
  • waste management
  • destruction of green spaces
  • natural habitats
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