below shows the life cycle of a salmon, from egg to adult fish‎

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diagram shows that there are a number of processes involved in the ‎commercial production of frozen
fish
pies.overall, The main ingredients consist of fresh ‎salmon, peas and sauce, with sliced potatoes, and they are prepared separately. ‎ The potatoes, which may have been delivered up to a month in advance, are ‎cleaned, peeled and cut into slices. The slices are boiled and
then
chilled before ‎being stored until needed. The preparation of the
fish
is more labour intensive ‎than the preparation of the potatoes. Within twelve hours of being delivered to ‎the factory, the fresh
fish
is cooked by being steamed with lemon juice and salt. ‎
Then
the skin and bones are removed by hand and disposed of
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before a visual ‎inspection takes place.‎ After
this
, the pies are assembled in microwaveable containers Peas and sauce, ‎which have
also
been prepared, are added to the
fish
and
then
the pie is covered ‎with a layer of cooked potato slices. The pies are
then
wrapped and frozen. At ‎
this
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they are ready for dispatch, or they may be stored at the factory before ‎being dispatched.‎
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