One of the consequences of improved medical care is that people are living longer and life expectancy is increasing. Do you think the advantages of this development outweight the disadvantages?

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Currently, with the advance in science humans are developing new technologies in all areas, especially in health care making people live more.

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is resulting in a contentious debate about whether is a positive development or not. I tend to disagree

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more advantageous because

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will result in dreadful problems for mankind. On the one hand, there are some positive points for people living longer.

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, renowned scientists would be able to go

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with their researches and find out more interesting aspects of life.

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, individuals will enjoy their retiring time longer and spend more time with their families.

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, humankind will achieve more and be happier knowing they would have more time after working life.

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, the world will face appalling issues if more people live over 100 years.

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, overpopulation would be a major issue because there will not be enough land to build houses and farming food for everyone,

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, our natural resources would decrease rapidly.

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, there is a retiring pension problem, with the same birth rate and the population living more there will not be enough money for everyone retiring.

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, with life expectancy increasing mankind will have tough issues to tackle. In conclusion, I believe that dying later is great for the individual,

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, our world would be doomed with new problems.

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why I think is more disadvantageous because we would lack resources and land for a bigger population resulting

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the end of the world as we know it.

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life expectancy
medical advancements
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wisdom
overpopulation
resource strain
aging population
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retirement planning
pension systems
sustainable living
generational divide
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