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The ability of the UK
students
 to manage their
finances
 is represented in the given pie chart and the proportion of
students
 by age who think they are very organised at managing their
finances
 is charted one the table. As shown in the pie chart, three in every four
students
 are confident to say they are either ‘very’ or ‘fairly’ organised financially. When one in five say they are not very organised in
this
 area, a negligible proportion(4%) rate themselves as ‘not at all organised’. As shown in the table, of the 21%
students
 who are very organised in managing
finances
, the older seems to be well- organised than their younger counterparts. The rate of
students
 who are over 26, who are very organised in their financial affairs is almost twice
than
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that of the proportion of
students
 under 22(18%). Just over a quarter of
students
 between 23 and 25 falls in
this
 category. Overall it is clear that, in general,
the
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UK
students
 can manage their
finances
 well.
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