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Some People Believe That Nowadays We Have Too Many Choices

#people #choices
Although
 there are many
choices
 in our
life
 that has a negative effect, we need to various
choices
 in modern
life
. It is a good thing to have the ability to choose from a wild variety. Some people disagree with that.
However
, I completely agree that many
choices
 give us a chance to have whatever that we want.Take
for example
 gastronomy. Every person has different meals on their list of favourites actually if you have a bigger family it is almost impossible to cook something that everyone would like.
Therefore
 I would say that it is great that you can go to the shopping centre and choose from dozen different types. I can always find something that looks delicious.
Also
,when we go to a restaurant ,we can choose the cheaper one. Apart from some people who say it is against evolution. If we come back
in
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 the old days,we could not choose a job
as a result
, everybody was farming.
However
, nowadays we could choose a job that fits my ability. I mean no one is the same.
In addition
, when we study in university , we could choose a major that interesting to us
then
 we will work as we want.
Furthermore
, in our free time, there is various option to do.
For instance
, we can stay at home and we can watch television there are many channels for interesting as well as spor channel for a person who likes sport. in conclusion, I am happy to have gather
choices
 in our
life
 that makes our
life
 easier than before.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • overwhelmed
  • decision fatigue
  • paralysis by analysis
  • consumerism
  • globalization
  • personal autonomy
  • market saturation
  • option overload
  • decision-making process
  • psychological well-being
  • buyer's remorse
  • customization
  • trade-offs
  • minimalism
  • information superhighway
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